BUILDER.md

@@ -298,23 +298,27 @@ CONTRIBUTING; the shared flow lives here and is not restated there.)
    ([#50 D11](https://github.com/heavy-duty/ceremony/issues/50)).
 
 **A fix round may ride a draft.** An engine may convert a PR back to draft
-when a round closes, and crew#139's does: where an engine's own rules make a
+when a round closes; crew#139 proposes exactly that, and is still an open
-builder's mid-round pushes *saves* rather than proposals, every save fires CI
+proposal. What it names is the status quo without it: where an engine's own
-— 41 of 106 commits across crew's last 25 PRs, by that issue's measurement. Ceremony implements no such conversion and this passage
+rules make a builder's mid-round pushes *saves* rather than proposals, every
-specifies none; it is written down because a builder or a reviewer who meets a
+one of those saves fires CI while the PR sits ready — 41 of 106 commits
-mid-round draft has to find a state the doctrine describes. What it means is
+across crew's last 25 PRs, by that issue's measurement — and converting back
-what a draft already meant while you were building, extended and not changed:
+to draft is what would stop them. Ceremony implements no such conversion and
-the draft phase is yours and the panel cannot see it (Building, above). Whose
+this passage specifies none; it is written down because a builder or a
-ball it is does not change either — the round outranks the draft, so you still
+reviewer who meets a mid-round draft has to find a state the doctrine
-owe it whole, the fixes and the reply and the flip. The label axis says the
+describes. What it means is what a draft already meant while you were
-same thing in the machine's voice rather than in this one, and
+building, extended and not changed: the draft phase is yours and the panel
-[LABELS.md](LABELS.md)'s `state:building` row is where to read it (#205).
+cannot see it (Building, above). Whose ball it is does not change either —
+the round outranks the draft, so you still owe it whole, the fixes and the
+reply and the flip. The label axis says the same thing in the machine's
+voice rather than in this one, and [LABELS.md](LABELS.md)'s `state:building`
+row is where to read it (#205).
 
 **Ready-for-review is the act that ends the round, and it is the builder's
 alone.** No engine marks a PR ready. The flip asserts that the round was
 answered whole, and that assertion is the one judgement about a round its
-author cannot delegate to a machine: an engine may draft a PR, and crew#139's
+author cannot delegate to a machine: an engine may draft a PR, which is what
-does, but only the builder undrafts it.
+crew#139 proposes engines do, but only the builder undrafts it.
 
 **Where a draft suppressed the checks, green is proven at the flip and the
 request still follows it.** Step 1's precondition is the whole rule and this